If you really want to know:
I found your work, Well-detailed. Mostly when that doll went through my nerves, but not enough to give me shivers of any kind. I kind of like it when i reached the bottom, want to know why?, well, it's because of the fact that I really caught the moment of realization that...Wait no. Actually, the part only when Author-chan made a mistake was that some parts were, low-detailed.
You know, If you could Go like this scary~
As I walked in the normal night, a cold breeze splashed gently through my cheeks, As i walked alone in a lonely road, I could have sworn I heard laughing. I came across a tree that i didn't knew existed in front of the road, 'Huh, so this is why no one takes this road' I thought as I walked beside the tree, I didn't notice anything weird than a tree on the road so to speak , I almost passed the tree when- *rustle* *rustle*, I didn't even turned to my side to look at what's making the sound, thinking it was only the breeze, *rustle* Ignored *rustle rustle* Still Ignored, Almost away from the tree "Bella~", my head shot up and I quickly turned to see what or who was calling me, as I turned to see the object or person, I only found the tree still there, 'Huh? I-I thought I?...' My mind was bombard with questions, I only shook my head and try to calm myself, I turned to my front only to find a doll laying on the floor with a knife, all-bloody, the blood in my face went cold, I stared at the doll, eyes widen as I thought, 'This looks like it's wearing an Italian uniform...' my mind was again filled with questions- then went blank, as I noticed it's right arm stretched to my direction and pulled itself, then the left arm mimicked it's action, it was crawling to me slowly, I backed away only to make it crawl faster, It wore a smile that sent millions of shivers through my spine, I turned around and tried to run away, only to hit the tree trunk, my breathing hitched as I felt two arms snakes their way around my waist, "You're Mine Bella~" a voice with an accent sang through my ears, I quickly turned around ready to face who it was but luckily...No one, my heart started to beat like a drum being abused by a rock star. I turned around to face the tree, only to find it gone, "w-what?" I stuttered, I turned around again to go back ome and call it a day, it was stressful anyway but as I did, I only found the doll ready to stab me as I let out an ear piercing shriek.
My eyes shot open as i found my self in by bed, recognizing the scent, I was back inside my room,I thought I only dreamed about those things, 'but how-' I thought as I turned around only to find something that took my soul away, 'T-the doll!', it was there, on my side, all-bloody with the same knife on it's side, "Bella~" I froze, 'the doll just spoke' It held it's knife and was about to stabbed but said first
"It wasn't a dream. And now your MINE alone~"
You can try and use this idea and continue the story, try adding more thrilling details (I mean, Who wouldn't freak out waking and finding a bloody doll on their side~no?)
And last, Your a good writer, if this will make you better then, Your an Amazing Author-kun to me~ Love you~ *In a brotherly way of course*